I am participating in a Poetry Workshop where we will develop a habit of writing poems. The task for this week was to write an 8-line poem that has 2 quatrains (4 lines each)
Being the 14th/15th August, I was inspired to write:
When a land is broken by her masters
And the pain we forget, celebrate
What was seamless, borderless
Should never be independent… Interdependent!
When a line is carved around our hearts
And the wall we erect, reject
That we spoke in one tongue, sung
Songs once written in the same blood….Unheard!
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P.S This poem is posted under the Category – Relationships. I hope you understand why.
Edit: Please see how I rearranged this poem here
This is so lovely. A gentle and beautiful sentiment I know so well. Politics, especially politics of colonization, perhaps, takes no cognizance of people and that people are living things that feel pain, fear and sorrow.
Thank you for sharing this with us,
Absolutely! Thank you for your thoughts, I do appreciate.
It’s my birthday today in the US (8/14), and your poem is highly synchronous and meaningful for me here…I appreciate your poem greatly. <3 Thank you for sharing it!
Belated birthday wishes! I am really pleased to know that this poem resonated with you. Thank you for making it worthwhile :)
Dear Sonya,
Thank you for sharing this with us. This poem powerfully speaks to me that disconnection in here leads to disconnection out there.
All good wishes,
robert
Lovely!
Nice poem, yes the land was broken, did we gain anything,I sometimes wonder? :)
Ranu, whether we gained or not, a lot was lost for sure! Question for me is, in hindsight did even the then masters gain out of the division?
An easy way out perhaps? All I can see is that history has taught us nothing going by the way countries are being messed up by external events/intervention.
True, that
Thanks Ranu, I wonder too.
Beautiful 👍🏻
Thanks Zareen!
Beautifully expressed from a neutral position! And the line about the “line carved around our hearts” couldn’t be more true
Thank you Kunal! Though I would say I feel equal connections to both sides rather than neutral which implies impartial or detached.
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Your thoughts are completely expressed despite the limitations of the requirements of the workshop. Relationships do start in the larger world although I think most would’ve written about one on one emotions. Your insights are powerful and beautifully expressed…
Thank you Kanwal. I enjoyed your very thoughtful comment. You nailed each aspect precisely.
Yes, the workshop requirements were limiting.
Relationships need to be extended to the population and environment at large. Only then can our one-on-one emotions have depth.
I am sure you can stretch your wonderful comment writing skills to posting insights on your blog :)