my tongue tastes the
sweetness of your breath
ears yield to
gentle whispers
skin shivers at the thought
of your warm scent
I avert my eyes as
you gaze knowingly
**
let Him take away
my humanity
my sanity
my intellectuality
even my reality
but if He deprives me
any of my senses
I shall complain bitterly
till the end of my days
and each moment of infinity
shall be spent in defiance
This is a wonderfully, deceptively complex poem. I kind of see it as a failed a toxic love being compared to a God, a false god, like all gods or Gods are. such duality such quality. Defy!
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I agree about the complexity of the poem, am glad that you see it that way. My defiance to God is in the belief that we are encouraged to question as opposed to submissively accept His word.
Thank you for your perspective and am pleased to welcome you to my blog.
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Oh.
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Is it Oh…no ?
or Oh …dear ?
:)
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The latter; this is extraordinary.
The different two tones of this poem and the way Love and God have been addressed is…well, daring. And exciting. Love the way it’s done!
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Yes I was rather daring … which is why I was nervous about asking you :)
Thank you so very much for your feedback.
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It’s always a pleasure reading your works, honestly! <3
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Dear Sonya,
I like this poem. Thank you for sharing it. It brings to mind certain persons close to me and certain forces close to me.
All good wishes,
robert
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Thanks Robert. I’m glad it has the effect of closeness on you.
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I believe He would be worse off for taking away senses that are so delightfully perceptive of Him. This is the type of poetry that dares readers to come close and test their beliefs. I can only imagine the courage and sincerity of the poet. Bravo!
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Thank you for your kind appreciation. Means a lot, more so when I have done something out of the norm.
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That is sexy.
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:)
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It is a great piece Sonya. Ripe with sensuality and a hint of something else. Love it, totally.
Stay well, and keep sensing… feeling…
warmest
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Hi mj, It’s lovely to hear from you. Thank you for appreciating this. I think that hint of “something else” may just be courage :) I had to step out of my comfort zone for this poem.
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Courage… and the fluency that follows.
Stay out of your comfort zone – you do very well there. :)
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I really love this! I can feel your words…thanks for sharing. RJ
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Well thank you for visiting and reading :)
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Wonderful poem,Sonya.
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Thank you, Ranu. Always happy to have you read my work :)
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